01. Why Aaron, or . . .
why is this not better written, when Aaron is such a good writer. Some people, including myself, have given it some thought, and these are my impressions.
a. Original vs. non-original
This is almost entirely original, when he seems to work better with a story that is not quite as original.
b. Solo author vs. multiple authors
Here he is the solo author, when he might write better with other authors, who can buttress his writings fore and aft.
c. Short vs. long
He might write better if he has longer to tell the story. Longer than what you find here.
02. Why Bianchi, or . . .
Why can an illustrator not draw a child that looks like a child instead of a miniature adult, which I have seen in some stories. Bianchi is not as bad as that, but the characters of the boy (Sogarth) and the girl (Loktus) are not drawn consistently, as their appearance differs from panel to panel, so they appear to be different ages at the same point in the story.
To be continued . . .