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Title: Need some help with a short story.
Post by: akiratubo on August 18, 2015, 10:24:26 PM
I'm writing a short story about a man who inherits his estranged father's estate.  He discovers that his father had built a robot maid, with the ultimate aim of building a biological robot, kind of like the replicants from Blade Runner.  At the end, the maid finds out her creator has died.  She digs up his grave to get his body in order to "fix" him, as she can't comprehend death.  I'm having trouble deciding which direction to go.

Does she: take the son's organs (thus killing him horribly) to put in the father's corpse, hoping that replacing broken parts works on a human like it does her

or

Does she: try to assemble a new body with her creator's replicant technology, thus creating a hideous creature?

I'm leaning towards the first option, as that seems like something a sentient machine might actually think of doing, though the second option has some delicious possibilities.
Title: Re: Need some help with a short story.
Post by: LilCerberus on August 18, 2015, 10:48:41 PM
Well, in the first scenario, there'd be the matter of potential tissue rejection, even among blood relatives, something you could explain to a computer as compatibility issues, whereas in the second scenario, it would depend on whether the body was mummified or cryogenicly  preserved, as well as salvaging lost data from a dead brain.
Title: Re: Need some help with a short story.
Post by: BoyScoutKevin on August 19, 2015, 03:54:51 PM
Quote from: akiratubo on August 18, 2015, 10:24:26 PM
I'm writing a short story about a man who inherits his estranged father's estate.  He discovers that his father had built a robot maid, with the ultimate aim of building a biological robot, kind of like the replicants from Blade Runner.  At the end, the maid finds out her creator has died.  She digs up his grave to get his body in order to "fix" him, as she can't comprehend death.  I'm having trouble deciding which direction to go.

Does she: take the son's organs (thus killing him horribly) to put in the father's corpse, hoping that replacing broken parts works on a human like it does her

or

Does she: try to assemble a new body with her creator's replicant technology, thus creating a hideous creature?

I'm leaning towards the first option, as that seems like something a sentient machine might actually think of doing, though the second option has some delicious possibilities.

How old is the son in the 1st scenario? 17 and under or 18 and over? Believe me, I have seen a lot of 17 and under killed in fiction, and it works only half the time (IMHO) and this is from seasoned authors. Thus, I gravitate to the 2nd scenario, as it has a better chance of working (again IMHO.) Anyway . . .?! If you wish, then post it here at this board, when you are finished, as many of us, including myself, would be interested in reading it. Again, the best of luck with your writing.
Title: Re: Need some help with a short story.
Post by: Ed, Ego and Superego on August 19, 2015, 04:17:03 PM
I would give thought to..trying to make him come back with HER technology (nano-bio-tech), then failing and in a sort of logical A to B to C strat experimenting with more "natural" solutions culminating with his closest relative.
Title: Re: Need some help with a short story.
Post by: akiratubo on August 19, 2015, 04:27:24 PM
Thanks, guys, this is actually helping a lot.   :thumbup:
Title: Re: Need some help with a short story.
Post by: Flangepart on August 19, 2015, 05:35:06 PM
Hummmm...how about she tried the replicant tech on the kid, and he starts to turn into the old man, while still knowing who he is?
Title: Re: Need some help with a short story.
Post by: Ed, Ego and Superego on August 19, 2015, 06:34:12 PM
"And hs best friend is a talking pie!"

-Ed
Title: Re: Need some help with a short story.
Post by: Skull on August 19, 2015, 06:46:53 PM
The idea sounds like a science fiction/fantasy or science fiction/horror... It can go either way. There is no wrong direction (since you are the writer of the story) so both ideas are sound.

Age is irrelevant (unless there is meaning to it).

PS... I would like to read this when your finished :)
Title: Re: Need some help with a short story.
Post by: ER on August 20, 2015, 11:27:12 PM
That sounds like a good story! Good luck with whatever path you take to finish it, and congratulations on creating such a curiosity-building beginning.