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Wrote a new short story this week . . .

Started by indianasmith, May 02, 2016, 11:20:33 PM

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indianasmith

And posted it on my blog.  Read it, and tell me what you think!


(Please)



http://lewisliterarylair.blogspot.com/


"I shall smite you in the nostrils with a rod of iron, and wax your spleen with Efferdent!!"

Allhallowsday

Just barely started on it, but was struck with this line: " Men like his son, who would be joining him shortly. " 
Hard to read stuff online these days, but I'll try to finish.  Keep up the good work, it's interesting. 
If you want to view paradise . . . simply look around and view it!

indianasmith

Thanks,  AHD.  I hope you enjoy the rest of the story when you get a chance.


(Um - did that line strike you in a good or bad way??)
"I shall smite you in the nostrils with a rod of iron, and wax your spleen with Efferdent!!"

Allhallowsday

Quote from: indianasmith on May 03, 2016, 06:17:11 PM
Thanks,  AHD.  I hope you enjoy the rest of the story when you get a chance.


(Um - did that line strike you in a good or bad way??)
Until I read the whole story I can only say I think I know where you'd go with such a story and that line, presumably simply functional, may also be a foreshadow. 
If you want to view paradise . . . simply look around and view it!