"The Horror of Party Beach" Haiku

[Andrew]

Water fish-monster
Lover of hotdogs and blood
Sodium allergy

No obvious reason for this, I was just in a strange mood.

[Scottie]

Is now a good time to flex my chance at winning a free DVD from Andrew, or am I going to make an ass out of myself?

"Sodium allergy" has six syllables in it, Andrew. Your haiku is kaput.

[ulthar]

Scottie Wrote:
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> "Sodium allergy" has six syllables in it, Andrew.
> Your haiku is kaput.

It's cool....change sodium to soda, which is a term often used for sodium.

[Andrew]

Scottie Wrote:
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> Is now a good time to flex my chance at winning a
> free DVD from Andrew, or am I going to make an ass
> out of myself?
>
> "Sodium allergy" has six syllables in it, Andrew.
> Your haiku is kaput.

This is something I was aware of, but I do not believe all haiku must have 5, 7, 5.  I know I have seen them with small departures.  I did not want to break the standard rule, but man was it fun to end with "sodium allergy" in there.

[Mofo Rising]

I'm the last alive
All the blood and the bullets
Oh God, it's a zom-

With apologies to Lewis Carroll's "The Hunting of the Snark"

[Scottie]

Scotie is sorry
haikus should be flexible
my face beams with red

No hard feelings Andrew.

[Shadowphile]

And no DVD either.  Bummer....

[Scottie]

Scottie will work hard
Those DVD's will be his
extortion racket

[LilCerberus]

Fishmen on my lawn
This has to be bad
It makes my lips perse

[RCMerchant]

Dear Lord...what madness have I stumbled upon...this place gets stranger by the minute...

[Scottie]

A fish monster once
approached looking for humans.
No humans here, I said.

I once read someone describe the best haiku as the one that is least noticed. The example given was something along these lines:

little bird walking
over wet roof. footprints it
leaves behind.

The intent of the haiku is to make the reader feel as though they are there and to give them subtle emotions with these few, precious words. I like this one above. Subtle, to the point, and lots of room for emotional interpretation

[BeyondTheGrave]

RCMerchant Wrote:
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> Dear Lord...what madness have I stumbled
> upon...this place gets stranger by the minute...


Well you will be desensitized eventually were all of this becomes normal... or you just crack. :)

[ulthar]

Bad Movies Dot Org
Overall insanity
for one skull or two

[LilCerberus]

rich andrini Wrote:
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> RCMerchant Wrote:
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> > Dear Lord...what madness have I stumbled
> > upon...this place gets stranger by the
> minute...
>
>
> Well you will be desensitized eventually were all
> of this becomes normal... or you just crack. :)


Bad are the movies
Our brains are worn out
The new guy will learn

[RCMerchant]

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